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Sean Talbeaux's avatar

Props for diving into this question, and revealing your process around it. I think it's important. I'm grappling with it too.

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Bryan Winchell's avatar

Hi guy,

I'll start with my own, umm, startling confession: I've yet to read beyond about the photo of "I Really Like Slop," yet I've got the nerve to write a comment!

(I do intend to finish the article, which I was really enjoying, partly because the writing is very good but also because this topic has been on my mind to write about, as well.)

Anyway, I just wanted to ask you: Who wrote the first two paragraphs?

I ask because that "you will do" ending of the second sentence really broke my brain. ("Yet if you don’t let them, and you use them like obedient assistants or training wheels on a bike, maintaining the intention to learn yourself, you will do.")

I ran both paragraphs through Grammarly and it didn't flag that, so then I asked ChatGPT if the grammar was okay on these two opening sentences. I won't repeat what it wrote about sentence #1 (unless you want me to), but it also flagged that "you will do ending."

Here, I'll post what it said, and like me, it's curious what your response will be.

Over the past few weeks, I've been publishing the journal I wrote in jail and using Grammarly and sometimes ChatGPT to edit, but the former certainly misses some big mistakes sometimes. Anyway, very thought-provoking article---what I've read so far has been, at least---I'll finish it later! Here was ChatGPTs response---and again, mostly curious who wrote that, or, if there's some way you can explain how that ending makes sense! you do"

I learned to speak Spanish partially by using Google Translate, and to find my way around Barcelona using CityMapper, both tools which will, if you let them, entirely hijack your brain to the point where you have outsourced everything to the machines.

Yet if you don't let them, and you use them like obedient assistants or training wheels on a bike, maintaining the intention to learn yourself, you will do.

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CHAT GPT response

Sentence 2:

Original:

Yet if you don’t let them, and you use them like obedient assistants or training wheels on a bike, maintaining the intention to learn yourself, you will do.

Issues:

1. The phrase “you will do” is grammatically off. It’s likely a truncation of “you will do fine” or “you will learn,” but as it stands, it’s unidiomatic and confusing.

2. Minor style: “maintaining the intention to learn yourself” could be clearer as “maintaining your own intention to learn” or “continuing to learn yourself.”

Suggestion:

Yet if you don’t let them, and instead use them like obedient assistants or training wheels on a bike—while maintaining your own intention to learn—you’ll do just fine.

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